Mermay Challenge - Story Telling

here is the revised work taking into consideration the feedback, thanks all.

Mermay Challenge - Story Telling

Hello! I appreciate all feedback, What I would want to focus on is how can I remain loose and put further emphasis on my Focal points. As well as How would you improve my composition. For this challenge I wanted to focus on story telling. but ALL feedback is welcome! thank you

I started this as a quick sketch, and then just spent the whole day rendering this guy. Reference: Statue of david Feedback - Anything that I can improve on etc, can be niche or broad. I won't apply the feedback on this study But i Sure as hell will break it down and apply it to my next study. Thanks!