Amazing drawing! I like the colors… 👀👀👌 I changed the face anatomy slightly and lightened the right side of the face to create a more gradual transition. (Btw, I accidently removed some of the orange outlines for the lighting but it’ll probably be better if you readded them back) I noticed in most Chinese art pieces that they have softer outlines on the hair, and darker lines with the hair close to the face and on the eyes. I adjusted the eyes based off references aswell.
the gradual face light in the paintover helps a lot, maybe bring the orange light outlines back just on the cheek and hair edge so the bounce stays without fighting the softer hair lines
maybe keep the orange edge only where the cheek turns into shadow, then let the hair edge fade sooner so the face light stays the first thing i notice
lovely feedback!