I can't exactly help with much since i'm an student too, but i'll point some small stuff i noticed. 1. the neck doesn't curve that much even with the head looking down, and it must follow the spine curve. 2. the trapezius muscle helps shape the neck 3. the esternocleidomastoid attaches both to the clavicle and the sternum m it doesn't curve musch aswell. for the colors i think you should put the whole piece in grayscale and compare the tones, the characters colors and the background color is almost the same, try making the characters shadows darker and making the background slightly lighter.

I am always struggling a little with faces and the neck, and i want to know if the storytelling works in that pieace or if something is off. For example after i drew this piece i thought that the scatches could lead the viewer to believe she had a fight with a women but in reality it was a man.The idea (very shortly described)was a high class prostitude the moment after she killed one of her clients who went too far. i also would like to get some feedback to the colours and values. in my opinion the background and the foreground are not seperated enough, any idea on that? i would also like to know what you think about the piece as a whole, does it work, could i have chosen a more suitable pose or colours? Thank you in advance for the feedback, Greeting Vincent

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Ian GHace 7 meses

With the storytelling, think the knife could stand out more, since that’s a big story element, should be a focal point, and there’s not enough visual contrast, so you should work with the values there so pops out from the background.

@sunkakuHace 7 meses

I can't exactly help with much since i'm an student too, but i'll point some small stuff i noticed. 1. the neck doesn't curve that much even with the head looking down, and it must follow the spine curve. 2. the trapezius muscle helps shape the neck 3. the esternocleidomastoid attaches both to the clavicle and the sternum m it doesn't curve musch aswell. for the colors i think you should put the whole piece in grayscale and compare the tones, the characters colors and the background color is almost the same, try making the characters shadows darker and making the background slightly lighter.